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Message to Readers
second version; thank you for stopping by to read :')
Would "family/a language, love an art" be clearer with "family/is a language, love is an art"?
Peer Review
"Each leaves footprints" It really resonated with my own experiences of relationships and family.
Hopefulness, for sure. This is a poem about healing and making meaning out of your life, and you remind me that despair and awfulness is temporary.
what inspired these metaphors?
Reviewer Comments
I really enjoyed reading this poem; I think it resonates on many levels. The line breaks felt a little random, so you might want to think about why you chose to hit enter at those moments. I also found the phrases linked by a comma in the first two stanza's a bit puzzling; how are they linked? Can you make that clear? And what purpose does the comma serve? Good job, though, I'm excited to see where this goes.