Peer Review by Suri Purefoy (United States)

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Wild

By: Maeghan Bielski


PROMPT: WILD

The wild wind tossed and turned,

Creating a torrent of wisps and whirls,

Flowing through trees and vasts oceans, effortlessly.

It bites of branches, rips leaves from their perches;

Birds tumble through the sky, cartwheel after cartwheel...

Clouds stretch out, thin strips of cotton,

Small boats rock, backwards and forwards, side to side;

And in the clearing, where tall grass blows,

A small little boy stumbles over,

The wild wind whips by...

He lies spreadeagled,

Softly snoring. Asleep



Message to Readers

Any kind of feedback is great! I want to keep improving my writing :)


Peer Review

Fourth line down; I absolutely LOVE that line!


To me I got the emotion of free-ness, calm, yet there was something else that I cannot describe.


Reviewer Comments

This piece is great. I love the rhyming and tones you set, and I really adore your use in words and the descriptiveness of it all. It's fantastic!