Peer Review by Suri Purefoy (United States of America)()

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Mouse

By: Peppermint Lemonade


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In a stuffy dark attic,
at the top of a house, 
away from the traffic,
lives a quaint little mouse. 

He's always very careful
when he's looking for cheese.
His trip could be uneventful
or he could meet the Siamese. 

In a tiny dark corner
he hides his gems,
for when the days get colder
he'll need lots of friends. 

Oh, the adventure of living
his life in a farmhouse,
it's quite fitting
when you're a such small, little mouse. 


Peer Review

I love the frist stanza, but especially the last line, "...lives a quaint little mouse." So cute and eye-catching!


I smiled(I know that's not a feeling, but I don't really know how to describe what I felt). It brought back tender memories from watching childhood movies.


What inspired you to write this cute poem?


Reviewer Comments

Such a tender, sweet poem filled with the wonder and adventurous life a mouse lives.
Gorgeous words, and graceful lines! Fantastic job! I hope to read more of your writing soon!