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Wow, I didn't realize how much I could possibly learn about myself by doing this prompt. Also, I don't often write stories that feature fictional characters, they are often based off of myself, so this gave me the opportunity to explore Kayla's personality from the inside out, which I needed to do because I was entirely unfamiliar with her, because she is my opposite. Does the writing feel real to you? What about the environment? I would appreciate whatever feedback you can give me, so long as the message you leave is clear. I want to get better.
When Kayla sees her friends wearing different clothes than her and begins to panic. A lot is revealed about her character. She wants to look good, but not stand out. She isn't a trend setter like most fashion-obsessed characters in stories end up being. She's relatively outgoing but sticks with the same group of friends and has a fair amount of anxiety regarding social interactions. Kayla is a creature of habit; there's a certain way she's suppose to do things and there's no other way to do them.
I liked the description in the first paragraph about how her phone beeping makes her instantly awake and your ensuing descriptions were pleasing. If you decide to continue with this story, I'd like to see more of Kayla's inner thoughts. She acts like a jerk to her sister but judging by the voice inside her head and how she panics when she doesn't match her friends' outfits, she's incredibly insecure and feels the need to fit in above anything else.
I really like how you responded to this prompt. The environment is "real," as in, believable. Fictional characters tend to greatly resemble ourselves, which is why we get the saying, "write what you know." Kayla isn't a flat character but is fully fleshed and three-dimensional. I can tell you put a lot of thought and effort into this story and it didn't go to waste.