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Idk I kinda just wanted to vent... point out anything you didn't like or any structural/grammatical errors i made pl0x and thank you.
I really liked the straight-talking nature of Ted. When his "buddy" George pricks Ted for being silent in class, Ted's response, charged with emotion and gravity, yet delivered with a steady and "uncaring" manner, captures the essence of Ted's character. Ted isn't afraid to share his unfiltered thoughts, and that is what I like most about him.
Putting the reader in the scene of a noisy classroom is a great hook that grabs attention immediately. Personally, I know what a rowdy class looks and sounds like, so I especially liked the opening descriptions of the class. Juxtaposing Ted from the rest of the class sets up a conflict which ends up being the crux of the story. One suggestion for going forward with this story might be spreading the dialogue of the mean classmates. So, starting with "Don't be such a killjoy," perhaps give each taunt its own line of dialogue spoken by different kids in the class. It could add to Ted's feeling being surrounded by the taunts. Formatting can really enhance the meaning that a story can hold, so going forward think of how you can arrange your words to add meaning to the story. Finally, the long speech by Ted at the end hammers at George and leaves the reader speechless as Ted lays down some deep words that make us think of ourselves, since we've all been in a situation of not being in the majority.
In the first sentence, were the boys jeering because the teacher didn't give them homework? I think you might have meant because they did have homework. Besides that small detail, I could follow the story well. All in all, this was quite good as it displayed raw emotion in an ironically calm and controlled way, and it put the reader in a situation that was relate-able. Going forward, explore with the formatting of the story and of other work you write, I think it'll really increase the powerful impact that your writing already has on readers.