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This is probably makes no sense. Thanks for reading though =) ;)
This was an interesting read that stimulated my curious side and had me questioning what "feeling" was. This piece blends philosophical elements with personal touch to create an intriguing story. The descriptions along the way were vivid and eye catching, making the piece that much more enjoyable. I was confused in some places with what you were trying to say, but as you said in your message, that was kind of what you were going for :) Besides switching persons(I, it, we) somewhat confusingly, the syntax was solid. All in all, this was really cool. I liked how you knew it might not have made sense to readers, but you still decided to post it anyway.