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A very, very rough draft. I'd like feedback on anything, but especially on where I might not be explaining/hinting things well enough. Thank you!
the mirrors of sunlight. were. super. cool.
I liked the main character the best because he seems so real. and sleepy. and not wanting to get up (like me on weekends, lol)
Xe. that guy. or bird?
I understood pretty much all of it. I REALLY liked the part where he's talking about majoring in necromancy so no-of-course-he-can't-open-the-stone-door.
ready. excited. totally with the main character.
Xe is sorta confusing... but interesting.
Keep writing! it's awesome! lol I was unable to decifer if the main character was a guy or a girl.