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Crazyspark1

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Message to Readers

This is my first draft. You can fix any grammatical issues or give me ideas on how to change things to make it more interesting. Thank you for taking the time to look at it:)

OUSTIDE

January 11, 2017


PROMPT: TV Pilot Competition → Ania M.

CUT TO SCHOOL -- WALKING TO THE CAFETERIA

Ania goes to her VIRTU comp. (a computer) and logs in for school. Ania virtually walks to her lunch period. She goes over to the counter where you get your food. Behind the counter is the lunch-lady avatar robot. Ania picks out her food and walks over to the table where her friends sit. On her way there she sees a boy. He is sitting at the far back of the room by himself, eating nothing but a sandwich. She then gets distracted when her friends arrive the table.

ANIA:
                                                             Who is that kid?
VALERIE:
                                                             No clue.

ALLY(16) blondish brown hair, green eyes, fair skin w lots of freckles:
                           I heard he was saved from the outside.
VALERIE:
                                                            Yea right. They wouldn’t let him log in if he was.

Another friend, Jade comes over and sits down on the opposite side from Ania and Val, next to Ally.
JADE(15)black straight hair, brown eyes, darker skin:
                                                          What’s all the fuss about?
VALERIE:
                                                           There is a new kid
JADE:
She looks over her shoulder.
                                                            He’s kinda cute!
ALLY:
                                                           Eww.. no way. You think every guy is cute

They all laugh at the thought. Ania stares at him, thinking.
VALERIE:
Nudges Ania with her elbow
                                                          Well, stop staring at him and go talk to him!
ANIA:
Starts picking up her tray to leave and throw away trash.
                                                          Haha, how about no.
Show different scenes of Ania contemplating. 

CUT TO ANIA'S ROOM EVENING

Show her logging off of school, putting on p.j.s, and laying in bed looking at the ceiling

V.O. ANIA

                                                          Where did he come from?

CUT TO SCHOOL HALLWAY MORNING

Ania is walking to her Polish class

V.O. ANIA

                                                         And so the day begins.

CUT TO ANIA IN DIFFERENT CLASSROOMS (Math, Bio, and Health)

Show Ania in her different classes, writing on paper, looking at the window, talking to her friends. She had Val and Ally in her classes, she hasn’t seen Jade yet.

CUT TO THE HALLWAY → Ania and Ally are walking together

ANIA:
                                                        Have you seen Jade today?
ALLY:
                                                        I think she might be sick.
ANIA:
                                                        Aw. I hope not.

They continue walking.
ALLY:
                                                       If we don’t see her today then we can text her after school
ANIA:
                                                       Sounds good to me
               
CUT TO LUNCH ROOM

They still haven’t seen Jade. Ania looks around, her eyes stopping on the boy.
The boy is eating a sandwich but he has a book in his hand. The book is an actual paper book → not very common. All the other books are electronic.
Ania gets up from the table and walks over there.
VALERIE:
                                                      Where ya goin?
ANIA:
                                                      I’ll be right back.

As Ania walks closer the boy makes no such recognition that she was coming.  She stands before the table for a few seconds before sitting across from him.
JACOB(16) Black hair, grey eyes, freckles and fair skin.
                                                    What can I do for you

Still not looking up at her.
ANIA:
                                                    I was wondering how you got that book

This time he lifts his gaze from the book to look at her. Startled, she looks away.
JACOB:
                                                    I’ve had it for a while
ANIA:
                                                   What’s it about?

He takes a moment to fold one of the corners of the page and hands the book to her. She examines it closely. It looks old, but in good condition. She feels the pages. He watches her while she looks at it. The name of the book was, “THE REALM OUTSIDE” , She hands the book back to him. She is slightly shocked but tries not to show it.
ANIA:
                                                  Sounds interesting

He looks at her and nods
ANIA:
                                                  Where are you from?
JACOB:
----
ANIA:
                                                  Where’s that?
JACOB:
Kind of smirks
                                                  You’re full of questions, aren’t you?

They are silent for a little while.
Ania starts to rise from the table.
ANIA:
                                                 I told my friends I would be back, I better get back to them.
JACOB:
                                                 Ok, bye.

Picks up his book again.
Ania gets up and turns around, only to turn back around and look at him
ANIA:
                                               Wait, what’s your name?
JACOB:
                                               The name’s Jacob. And yours?
ANIA:
                                               Jacob. Got it. Mine is Ania.

Ania walks back to the table her friends are sitting at.

CUT TO HER ROOM (LATER THAT DAY)

Ania is on the phone with Jade.
ANIA:
                                              I talked to that boy today
JADE:
                                              NO WAY!
ANIA:
                                             Yea, he was reading a book. Like, a paper one.
JADE:
                                             Those still exist? Who knew.
ANIA:
                                              It was about.. The OUTSIDE.
JADE: 
                                             What about the OUTSIDE?
ANIA:
                                              I didn’t get to read it, but I saw some things about what is out there. Beyond our VIRTU comps.
JADE:
                                             You’re freaking me out. They wouldn’t allow that in VIRTU.
ANIA:
                                             Maybe they don’t know.
JADE:
                                            Ania. THEY know everything.

CUT TO ANIA’S DARK BEDROOM → WINDOWS SHOW STARS

The boy shows up. He wakes her up. She is startled and begins to move away from him.
JACOB:
He whispers. Acts calm.
                                            I need help.
ANIA:
 Loudly whispers. Very startled
                                            WHY ARE YOU HERE?!
JACOB:
                                             I told you, I need help.
ANIA:
                                            Well, what is it?
JACOB:
                                             I need you to come OUTSIDE with me.

Ania doesn’t know how to react, they are just seen staring at each other. They gather a small backpack with stuff Jacob grabbed (---)
JACOB:
                                             Do you have a flashlight?
Ania nods, grabs one from the drawer and hands it to him. He puts it in the bag.
In Ania’s room, Jacob leads her to a window. He removes the window as quietly as he can.
ANIA:
                                               Did you come through the window?!
She asks with disbelief in her voice
JACOB:
                                               Yes. Are you ready?
Ania nods. When the window is removed, it is replaced by darkness. No stars are shown any longer. (Like the rest of her windows) She looks OUTSIDE with astonishment. They climb out and Ania stands there staring at everything.

END.
 

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