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I would love any spelling and/or grammar checks. I am really bad at spelling, so all the help you can give me would be great. Feel free to tell me everything you want to. I want to know if it's good, if it's too much, or if you hated it. Feel free to share. Thanks for the help.
hrmm..... the colors?
hrmmm... definitely the step mom. Chilly. professional.
Her dad. Was he mean to sarah too? or was he just lonely so he married a wife?
I didn't understand the transition between here world and there world. Did she go to jail?
hrmm... I know this is Write the World and we all love to write, but I find it sad and disappointing that after seeing her real mom and being freed from seeming tyranny, she would want to stare at paper....
Perhaps the girl could want to write a story with her mom? or with her mom and dad?
I think "Idiotic" just doesn't fit. If the step mom loved the daughter, she wouldn't have used that word, and if she hated the daughter, I think she would have used a stronger word; without hesitation.
lol that all sounds kinda harsh, but it's constructive at least! :) keep writing!~