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The repetition of the structure used both in "it was the money that put me on the rooftop that evening" and "it was the code, and only the code, that put me on the driveway that night". This shows perfectly the internal conflict of the narrator which is so beautifully described throughout. It also draws back to a common theme of necessity, which, in turn, the writer makes sure to question constantly - what can be necessary about the act they have been asked to commit. It's an excellent moral dilemma for a person whom most would portray as completely amoral.
As I say, the use of extremely raw imagery towards the end even provokes a feeling of guilt and shame in the reader themselves. I felt as though I had witnessed the actual event itself.
Leading on from the last point, in what format does this kind of monologue appear? Is it just the narrator's thoughts? Is the narrator relating this to a particular person? Is it a journal? I think this is exceedingly important to consider as the reader is directly addressed at some points
I love this piece of writing, well done!