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Peer Review
Ariella is so cute and sweet! I love her character and she pulls you right into the story the way a little girl pulls you into a game! I'm so excited to hear what happens next!
The one thing I think you could add would be a bit more of Ariella's thoughts and reactions to things. Why does she love that dress? Why is she excited to leave? Is she nervous about being on the boat? It helps the reader dive into the story a little more because her thoughts slowly become theirs and they (I) find themselves just as excited as she is.
Reviewer Comments
I love this story! Please let me know if this review is helpful or if you ever need another one!
-V