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Message to Readers
I'd like what you enjoyed and what I could improve on! A critique, if you will.
I admired the poetic use of language and the choice of thorough, sensory description over straight-out plot. December opens itself up, I think, to this style of writing, which picks up on shared yet still deeply personal detail, allowing the reader to really relate to the piece. The writer has clearly made a conscious decision to endow the reader with reams of clever description using the medium of language to great effect, and the fact that this decision has been made in relation to the subject matter shows how conscientious the writer is.
I think the month of December, to them, means love and life, and also personal growth, as well as a connection with nature. I assume that the reference to Thales is deliberate in its play on his theories of nature and life based on water - it would fit in with your appreciation of nature throughout. Altogether, though, the reference to philosophy is very useful in guiding the reader as to the purpose of the piece, which can sometimes be unclear - the piece is, in itself, philosophical - this is why the reflective conclusion is so effective.
I felt as though this was the flaw of the piece, or certainly what I quibbled with the most, although obviously it's subjective. The writer is clearly in love with language but does tend to get increasingly carried away in description which is sometimes inexplicable and can be irrelevant. This can serve to sacrifice structure and fluidity throughout, unfortunately. I love how you craft language, but I think you need to try to create much more clarity whilst using your large range of vocabulary and sentence forms. Large passages of contradictory description can appear dense to the reader and they may struggle to get through it all. Some of my favourite times in this piece were when you broke up a charming paragraph with short, reflective, conversational sentences.
I think the ending was very charming - firstly you used reflection, which was a wonderful way to conclude, then came the sentence 'we thought the world would end in 2012', which was a marvellous and very cunning way of contrasting the life you've described throughout with death and loss, and then you finally create clarity on the extended metaphor of December before finishing with that lovely repeated sentence which binds the piece together. Brilliant ending.
Your use of language is very impressive, although you need sometimes to check your use of vocabulary in context. You have a lovely habit of placing rhythmically interesting phrases together as well as making your writing very sensory and beautiful. Your piece achieved something of a glow of feeling and emotion, which is how you can completely tell it's written from the heart.
Sorry if my highlights come across as harsh at times - I did genuinely like this a lot and I think if you perhaps thought about my suggestions it could be further improved. Well done and keep writing!