Klue

Australia

Hi! Lovely to make your acquaintance (I must admit, that's a bit formal). I've no idea how to structure this so I guess I'll wing it.
Ahem.
.~.~.~.
INTJ (apparently)
She/her
Forgetful (hence why I have no idea when I joined)
Reader

Message to Readers

Anything, really.
Different word choices, if it flows weirdly, grammar, etc.

She'll Reach for the Stars

September 26, 2021

First, they said she was too normal.
With normal hair,
normal eyes,
a normal life.
Then they said she was too quiet, 
that it was weird, 
how she could hold the secrets of the world,
in just her silence. 
Then they said she needed to hold back, 
keep her words in her mouth, 
swallow the questions down her throat. 
Then they said she was too young,
to understand
the world around her.
Then they said she was old enough, 
to know how to earn money, 
to know how to clean,
to know how to look after herself. 
She was alone from this point on. 
Then they said she was selfish, 
only focusing on herself,
not her brothers,
her sisters,
her family. 
Then they said she was too poor, 
wasting all her money, 
buying food, 
buying garments, 
buying toys to entertain her siblings. 
Then they said she was too ambitious, 
striving too high, 
reaching for the stars above her, 
not the branches of the trees 
that she could grab with her hand.
No one can reach the stars, they said.
Aim lower, they said. 
For once, she ignored their calls. 
Ignored the way they put her down. 
She kept reaching for the stars, 
until one day, 
the tips of her fingers 
brushed against them.








 
Don't worry, no fingers were burnt in the making of this poem.

(Critsicm appreciated!)
 

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25 Comments
  • Helena

    Hi! This is so beautiful! I absolutely love the ending, and congrats on the Writer Pick!!


    2 months ago
  • CreativeAngel

    I absolutely love this! Congrats on the Writer's pick!


    2 months ago
  • NewPoet

    This is incredible. I recently took a break from WTW, and this is the first piece I have read since coming back. You have inspired me in ways that words cannot describe.


    2 months ago
  • Ravi Tej Guntuku

    Congratulations on earning the Writer Pick! Your poem is very inspirational and effectively zooms in on the theme that everything you do seems wrong or doesn't fit within the boxes of society. I love how you end the poem o an inspirational note; this piece truly uplifts and empathizes with many people across the world. Keep writing & sharing!


    2 months ago
  • sophiacriesoverabook

    I love this! it's something a lot of people can relate to, feeling like nothing you do is right but this has an inspiring twist at the end that's perfect. lovely <3


    2 months ago
  • its_just_Rose

    This is a wonderful piece. Very lovely and inspirational. Congrats on writer's pick! I assume that you're new, so welcome to WtW, and nice to meet you. Also, I love your pfp!


    2 months ago
  • HighEntropy

    ahh in love with this! congrats <3


    2 months ago
  • KanjiKat

    If you want to reply to comments, just comment on a story that the person you want to reply to has published, and start it with RE:


    2 months ago
  • Camillaroo-350

    Re: Thank you!


    2 months ago
  • happy butterfly

    congratulations on writer's pick!! you definetly deserve it! i love this piece its very different to anything i've seen before. and welcome to write the world:) i hope you have lots of fun here.don't feel shy to reach out if you want to;)


    2 months ago
  • Klue

    Wait. Wait. Wait.
    Hold up.
    What????
    I'm sorry, I'm in an utter state of shock!
    I went on a holiday for a few days...and see this???
    My mind is blown.

    I have no idea how to reply to comments (and if it's even possible), but wow. This community is so welcoming and so lovely!


    2 months ago
  • ~rain~

    Oooooo beautiful


    2 months ago
  • Camillaroo-350

    That ending is absolutely BEAUTIFUL! Congrats on writer's pick!


    2 months ago
  • Writing4Life

    WOW. This is absolutely gorgeous! (also the footnotes cracked me up) Welcome to WtW; this is super impressive for your 2nd piece as well! Congrats on Writer's Pick!!


    2 months ago
  • lucida

    hey there! welcome to wtw and congrats on writer's pick! this poem is amazing


    2 months ago
  • Sophia15

    I love inspirational pieces like this, great job!


    2 months ago
  • Ismasura

    Congrats on Writer's Pick!!


    2 months ago
  • watermelons_words

    1) Welcome to Write the World! I’m Ann/Watermelon; feel free to reach out!
    2) Congrats on Writer’s Pick!
    3) This is INCREDIBLE!!!


    2 months ago
  • FantasyOtter12

    welcome to wtw!


    2 months ago
  • lone wolf

    welcome to wtw! I love how this poem flows and the inspirational message behind it. congrats on writer's pick!! :)


    2 months ago
  • Eblinn

    So good!!


    2 months ago
  • Raven Elite

    wow!!! this is amazing


    2 months ago
  • KanjiKat

    Congrats on Writer's Pick.


    2 months ago
  • Ann Maria Thomson

    Amazing!


    2 months ago
  • thebookishfey

    hey there, welcome to WtW! I really love this piece :)


    2 months ago