Stone of Jade

United States

~ 17 she/her ~
Aspiring writer and artist. Completely awestruck by night skies. Apart of many, many fandoms ;) Reader, journaler, collector.
~ pilot pens and beat-up notebooks ~
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Message to Readers

FEEDBACK DESPERATELY NEEDED.
i want to send this off for a contest themed "interconnectedness"

please please please review or at least comment with how i can improve.

thank you!!

a postage stamp away [MESSAGE BOX--FEEDBACK NEEDED]

September 11, 2021

FREE WRITING

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colored with colored pencils, 
written in pencil,
the address inked in ballpoint pen.

the envelope travels far,
sealed with a kiss,
stamped with a sticker.

from hand to mailbox,
mailbox to truck,
truck to airplane,
airplane to truck,
truck to mailbox,
mailbox to hand. 

the cycle repeats itself,
over and over,
to and from.

the envelope is torn open,
the letter slipped out,
its contents are laughed over, cried over, cherished. 

a pencil scratches a response,
the stamp is smoothed over,
its contents sent off.

each day I miss you more,
each moment I long for your smile.

the distance seems immense,
but really,
you are only a postage stamp away. 
 

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3 Comments
  • Writing4Life

    Whoaaa I love this! Best of luck for the comp!


    14 days ago
  • AREB

    Great !!!


    15 days ago
  • ✧♬TwinklingLights♬✧

    I really adore this! The structure is slightly choppy and repetitive. Maybe change it up a bit! Use more words that flow into each other and switch up the structure from time to time.
    Wonderful work!


    15 days ago