Written_In_Water

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Joined July 8th 2021

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"The more solitary, the more friendless, the more unsustained I am, the more I will respect myself. I will keep the law given by God...there I plant my foot" - Jane Eyre

If you've clicked on my page - Thank you! But if you want some much better stuff to read, turn around and go find these amazing accounts (they're all brilliant, so I put them in alphabetical order):

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Anne Blackwood
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Stone of Jade
WrenBirdWrites

The Ocean in the Hourglass

July 27, 2021

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Time moves so quickly now
As if someone has blasted a hole in the bottom of the hourglass
The sand gushes down and buries my feet
Like when we were kids

But the weight of time is greater than that of cheap sand
And I can't move my feet

The waters being dragged in by the tide
Are a good long way off
But soon they'll be drawn in close, up to my chest
And I know that I will not be able to move

I will be rooted down staring wide-eyed at the sky
Which is oh so far away

And the water will go way
over my head
And the warm salt will sting at my swamped eyes
And I'll be
In too deep
To see the stars in the sky

The ocean will thrash and churn
But I'll be under it in the still silence
Even now I know that the tide will pass me by
And I'll be left holding only a shattered hourglass
It's jagged shards pricking blood from my lineless palms
 
Not that polished sorry - to be honest I probably prefer the title to the actual poem haha - do you agree?

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6 Comments
  • Stone of Jade

    this is absolutely beautiful. amazing imagery. and i love the title. i am soo bad at titles XD this was perfect


    2 months ago
  • encapsulated_emotions

    how do u come up with such amazing concepts?


    2 months ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    I think I like the title and poem equally. They're both fantastic.
    "As if someone has blasted a hole in the bottom of the hourglass"
    Paints such a perfect picture.
    "But the weight of time is greater than that of cheap sand"
    Okay just turn your own metaphor over like that I am here for itttt.
    "And I'll be
    In too deep
    To see the stars in the sky"
    Again, so poignant and vivid!
    This whole piece is really amazing.


    2 months ago
  • Livsnjutare

    Stunning. This is such an amazing and heartfelt emotion-full poem!
    I love it, never stop writing!


    2 months ago
  • Ava Marie

    This is beautiful and I loved it so much. And although the title was what drew me in, I like the actual poem more.


    2 months ago
  • Tachi

    I don't think this needed to be polished. to me its raw with emotions.


    2 months ago