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I love the rhymes you've made, and still been able to incorporate such a steady rhythm. I especially love the bridge, even though it's really quaint, it left such an impact. Great job!
When revising, try thinking up of other elements. What if you were to have a post-chorus, maybe just a line to connect the chorus to the next verse. Or what about an outro? It could just be an 'ooooh' but an outro in any songs makes it feel really complete, instead of ending it with the chorus. There are a few tense/grammar errors, but that's totally fine! Remember to go over the grammar and spelling before you publish another draft. All in all (and i learnt this from another CA) spend more time with the piece. Don't be in any hurry to get another draft out.
Hey ~rain~! I really loved reading and reviewing this piece, you've done such a great job! Remember, all my suggestions are simply suggestions, feel free to take them or ignore them. I can't wait to see where you take this next!!!