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Feedback on this fortuitous thing is very much appreciated.
The simple hook of this poem, let me dream, has such a resounding impact. You've left a lot of place for interpretation, with just enough context, and that's not easy to do, being able to give just the right amount of information.. The rhyme scheme is also really great!
The repetition of 'let me dream' without any context as to whom the poet is talking to really leaves this question, who isn't letting the poet dream? Rather, what? You could also try to incorporate some other literary devices, such as assonance into these stanzas. Assonance refers to similar vowels in words one after the other, and since you're lines do not exceed more than four/five syllables, it would be a wonderful addition if you feel like using it,
Hey cookie.smuggler! I had so much fun reading and reviewing this piece, and I hope the feedback was helpful. Remember, all my suggestions are simply suggestions, feel free to consider them or ignore them. -SunV