Peer Review by Mr. Colin E. (United States)

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let me dream

By: cookie_smuggler [semi-hiatus]


FREE WRITING

let me dream
of starry nights
and flying kites
of rainy days
and sunny rays

let me dream
of golden tears
and elf ears 
of green pastures
and singing passers

let me dream
of loud ocean waves
and hollowed caves
of purple seashells
and twinkling bells

let me dream
of singing birds
and grazing herds
of chocolate and coffee
and sticky, melted toffee

let me dream
of you and me
and peach ice tea
of cotton candy sunsets
and healthy cigarettes

let me dream

i've been feeling kinda blue so i wrote something random with absolutely no point. bye.

Message to Readers

Feedback on this fortuitous thing is very much appreciated.


Peer Review

What delighted me about this piece was the good use of repetition with "let me dream" and the good rhyming pattern. Not only that, you go into a lot of depth about your likes like "elf ears" or "purple seashells", which is good because it shows how multifaceted you are. Very nice.


What else inspired you to write this piece and how did you feel before/after writing it.


Reviewer Comments

Hello cookie.smuggler, it's your friendly neighborhood Senior Peer Reviewer and I very much enjoyed reviewing this piece. I found it to be especially well rhymed and while there are some things in need of improvement, it's still a really good piece. I fully encourage you to keep writing and have a wonderful day.