First, I would like kind critical review. What can I improve on? Are there any grammatical errors? Any plot holes? Obviously it's meant to have a cliff hanger, because it's only the beginning of an adventure, but are there real plot holes within what I've given?
Second, I'd love to have positive feedback. What did you enjoy? What captivated you? How did you imagine the characters? What am I doing right?
Written By: DemelzaEnys
June 12, 2021