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I love love love the personification of the storm! The description is so mesmerizing and it's super impressive.
"...fearful of the consequences of their ancestors' actions." This line is haunting in a way. It would be cool maybe to go into what specifically those actions were, but I also think the piece is just fine without that too.
Like I said before, expanding how they got to this point would be interesting. I also think learning more about our narrator and about their personality and take on things would add a lot.
Keep doing what you're doing! The description of the storm is incredible and it creates such a vivid picture in my mind.
I LOVE THIS SO MUCH! The contrast of the storm and cozy fire is amazing and I can't wait to see what else you do!