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Message to Readers
you just want reviews
you don't want my comments
maybe you just hate the
thought of my bad writing
*to the tune of Attention by Charlie Puth*
I love how suspense ruled through the whole thing, and it stayed intriguing from the first word to the last. Although you used clever Science Fiction terms, they were easy to understand and explained in detail what they meant.
It's cool how although this is alien-related, it was unique and a new concept to perceive when thinking about what aliens could do if they found our planet.
I know there's a word limit where you could expand too too much, and either way, I found this already super detailed and easy to follow, but interesting too. You could possibly put in more backstory to what The Organization is, and how Aliyah got so involved in it.
I don't know what to say without repeating myself, but good luck, and you should feel very confident in this. Being able to use an alien concept, but still make it new, exciting, and well-structured is very impressive.
I can't wait to see how this turns out! I haven't posted it, but would it be okay if you review my entry? Thank you, and good luck! I'm sorry I didn't get a lot of highlighting in, but you did a great job on this draft!