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thought of my bad writing
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I think the plot escalation in general was really good, especially for being a short story like this. I also loved certain descriptions, they were very vivid. The line-up of humans and aliens and the chaos of escape, it was very-well done.
I liked how it was a take on our modern-day world how it'd be impacted by aliens. The references to the Grand Canyon and Burj Khalifa were cool, and you could add in even more. Maybe mention school or cell-phones? Or you could specify what year it is, if it's 2075 in this, maybe the world looks drastically different and you could talk about that.
I'd love to hear more about the character's backstory and The Organization. I know that it's mysterious on purpose, but I can't help wanting more!! XD
This is really good, I can't wait to see how you continue writing it.
Good luck with the comp!!