Avril

Canada

"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your front door."

seventeen years old
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The Laurentian Plateau

June 1, 2021

PROMPT: Place Poem

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we’re driving through the stone
moss-covered rock rises up on either side of the highway, they’re
age-old giants and
they’ve been here four billion years
 
and we’ll stop, because
peeking through the green
blueberries are growing in the cracks.
 
white moths dance above our heads as we pick,
a fly buzzes in my brother’s ear
and we don’t notice, but,
a black bear cub is dozing in the bushes, just ahead.
 
drive some more;
reach a campground, a lake.
waters lap against the rock
content within their enclosure;
the colour of coca-cola from a distance, but
look closer, cup some in your hands,
it’s clear.
 
around the bend, rock fades into sand
for a patch
waters fold up onto pale brown;
they pour into a large round hole surround by sandcastles.
 
 
a few steps back, a bench
where a woman sits
and watches all of this.
 
down the path a ways, the forest thickens.
wooden boardwalk winds between
towering aspens; slender ghosts reaching for the clouds with leafy hands.
 
bend down, spread out your hand
and touch the moss.
step on it, and you’ll sink for half a meter
before you reach the dirt.
 
      stop for a moment: listen.
     “twirp-twrip-twirp”, “chickadee-chickadee”, “ticka-ticka-ticka”.
 
      tilt your head back: breathe.
      it’s fresh as the morning and sweet as honey.
 
boardwalk turns to dirt path, which turns to rock
and the stone is echoing beneath us once more.
it becomes steeper and we’re walking up, up,
and then the lake is there again.
 
then, there’s a pile of clothes beneath a tree,
and we’re springing from the rock and soaring through the air
and landing with a splash.
 
and we’re squirming up, digging toes into cracks, and
wet feet are running down the rocks, slapping on the wooden boardwalk, sinking in the sand,
and we’re crawling into sleeping backs and zipping up tents and fading slowly into sleep.
 
we’ve taken its fruit and danced in its waters and ran through its forest, and now
they’re watching over us.
these age-old giants,
who’ve been here four billion years
The Laurentian Plateau is more commonly called “The Canadian Shield” and it stretches throughout some of the eastern and northern Canadian provinces and up into Greenland. It contains some of the oldest rocks in the world, some of which are estimated to be 4.3 billion years old.

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15 Comments
  • rmssmr

    Your descriptions are beautiful! Congratulations on Wednesday Words :))


    about 14 hours ago
  • The_Sunrise_Queen

    aaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhh this is so beautiful! I wanna go there now! AAAAAHHHHHH I love this sooo much. you deserved winning the wednesday words :)


    2 days ago
  • anemoia by a thread

    magical, this place! i wish i could go there and breathe the air that's "fresh as the morning and sweet as honey."
    congrats!


    4 days ago
  • celestialbard

    Congratulations!! This is so well deserved!!


    5 days ago
  • Luiza L

    This is so beautiful! I sincerely got lost in your words. Amazing as always! Congratulations Avril!


    5 days ago
  • Rose Beta

    I absolutely love it!!!


    5 days ago
  • Writing4Life

    Wow, this is stunning! Your word pictures are so evocative, and really bring your picture to life. Congratulations on Wednesday Words!
    I do have one question, if you don't mind me asking. I saw on your bio, you say you're a follower of Christ, and in here you say the trees have been around for 4 billion years. Do you believe in a young earth? Feel free not to answer if you don't feel comfortable :)


    5 days ago
  • FantasyOtter12

    Amazing!!! congrats on wednesday words!


    5 days ago
  • BizzleWrites

    WOW. You are such an amazing writer, this piece is just beautiful! I love how it's like... I think it's called a circle ending, how ends almost the same as it starts. This piece is AMAZING.


    5 days ago
  • barelybear

    AND OMG YOUR RECORDING! It’s so beautiful! You have a really great gentle voice and I felt like I was listening to an audiobook


    5 days ago
  • barelybear

    Ahhh you got Wednesday Words!!! So proud, and so well-deserved c:
    I still want to travel here so so much! Congrats :D


    5 days ago
  • Destiny_the_writer

    I love the imagery, the onomatopoeia, the ryhme scheme, everything just blends so perfectly.


    6 days ago
  • The Secret Society of Purple Iguanas of Death Online

    This is amazing! I love how you describe the stones, and the lake being Coca Cola colored but clear in your hand. I know exactly what it means and I’ve never heard it said better


    6 days ago
  • ScarlettLucian

    I love the imagery in this! I can so clearly picture all the plantlife and the rocks. Beautiful.

    And hopefully you get to make your way out to the East Coast sometime! It's wonderful out here, both Halifax and the surrounding area.


    11 days ago
  • barelybear

    Wow. This is just incredible! It somehow made me feel nostalgic for this place I’ve never seen. I loved the actions you put in there, from the woman watching to you “Landing with a splash.” And I am in love with this magical Coca Cola lake!!
    Re: thanks! I’m glad that came across! I really miss how cosy libraries are :c
    And re: oh boyyy your brother? Ooh I don’t think I’d be able to share something with mine haha. But I think I remember yours is the one about the jumpers and the breakup? It was very beautiful, so one day I think you should share it with him c:
    (I thought my dad was gonna get all weird but he didn’t, if that helps :P)


    13 days ago