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I found a lot of different emotions within this poem, which was awesome, because even though they felt contradictory at times, they all also made a lot of sense together. There was nostalgia and regret and hope and frustration, but at the end of reading this piece, I still was left with a feeling of comfort and remembrance, and it was really nice!
"Stuck in the in-between
Caught in relationships without depth
Wondering whether I’ll be lost in people’s memories."
This set of lines really spoke to me because you capture so perfectly how temporary these relationships are because you're moving around so much and how a lot of them are nothing more than just a vague memory of an incident that maybe someone else will look back on one day and remember, which was really cool to see how you instantly made me think of the larger story beyond just the simple words, so nice work!
You do this a bit at the beginning when talking about all the places you were able to see growing up in a military family, but I loved to see some more specific memories that could help underscore some of your points about what the pros and cons of that kind of life were. Having specific imagery of a concrete memory can help evoke even more feeling from your readers and really make your point come across in a memorable way!
I already love so much what you've done! You've written something deeply personal and captured it wonderfully through poetry and it really shows that this is something that matters to you. That stands out to people and your honesty is the best way of helping them feel connected to a piece, so just keep doing that and you're golden!
Best of luck with the competition and please reach out if you have any questions and/or comments for me! Hope you have a great day!