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*sigh* I’m still semi-new to poetry in general, so I’m not sure if this is any good. If any of y’all are good at poetry or even just a bit experienced, could you review this? I’ll review yours in return :)!!
Overall, this is a really sweet poem. I really enjoyed the imagery you have created throughout this poem.
I'm not sure if I can pick a favorite. I loved all of the really descriptive lines. I especially liked the one talking about the fie as a dancer. I loved the description you brought in there.
Overall, really enjoyed this. I have three pieces of general advice that I like to give.
First, don't get overwhelmed by the descriptions. Sometimes, less is more. Complex, sentences aren't always better, so maybe find a time where you can simplify some sentences.
Second, similar to what I said above, you have a lot of similar length sentences. It can help to add smaller sentences in some places, and that can really help add emphasis on what you shorten.
Third, if you added line breaks for stanzas, it would make it so much easier to read. There's nothing necessarily wrong with the way it is, but if you added line breaks, it would be less confusing, and less overwhelming.
I love the descriptions and the way you use them in your poem! This is really great!
This is such a good poem, especially for a beginner. I'm so excited to see what else you can do with this!