Peer Review by TheSpacePoet (United Kingdom)

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Jar of Us

By: anne_shirley04

Every house on this street is ours
All bathed in the same light
All belonging to the same street

And not even aware of it

Every sky across the world is the same
A different colour every day
A different message in the heavens

But the same canvas and palette

Every little light is a star
Whether it's a window with the light left on
Or a glowing starfish in the sand

They're all part of our night sky

I could stand on top of the tallest building in the world
And see every messy, beautiful person late for work
I could put them all in a jar and see every colour in one place

Peer Review

This is a very refreshing poem; it really reminds me of an early morning stroll, taking in the essence of a seaside city in the dark. It makes you think - everyone has their own story and purpose, and sometimes we forget that.

'But the same canvas and palette' - You get a real sense of community in this line. You have managed to dig up an important message in a single line - very impressive!

The sensory detail is excellent - I can picture every setting portrayed in this poem. Perhaps a few short sentences/one word phrases will encourage the reader to stop and consider what this poem means to them.

This is an amazing piece! You should be very proud of this!

Reviewer Comments

I'm unsure whether punctuation was intentionally missed, but it works very well either way :) Good luck to you!