jellybean568

United States

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I'm Lily.
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Joined 2021

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goldfish

April 19, 2021

for two cents, the man 
answering will reach into the ocean
open another sail & draw 
a second sky. in this picture
the sky was never just blue
but pink & yellow & orange long before
sunset- in your version of the story, lao lao
the bottle makes it across
an ocean & will wait on gaping sands for the promise
that even a family of dandelion hopes
rooted in the present
will make their way back on August winds

for a hundred ren min bi, the girl 
will pirate away the gold, 
will wish you, lao lao, “fortune like the east sea
& a lifetime like the south mountain”. if these words
come out with static, then nine years
has drifted a summer into a stranger, between us
is the trans-pacific cable & there’s a girl yelling 
in background, her sand castle was melting
too early, she was lost in the currents
between us, our paper card promises, a deep ultramarine

for three thousand dollars, mama
will buy the ticket. one-way & not home. 
in the wrinkles of her eyes 
there are long nights & somehow we still fit
two shots, polymer masks, a thousand
paper cranes & still everything
is left behind. the sky
should have been grey. in your stories
it’s always the ones smoking delicate arcs
& curves of dreams,
life, oxford comma before
stage 4 lung cancer, who disappear
into silence, into grey
but lao lao, what if people become stones
what if they sink after a few skips, even in this rain
only the bottle is allowed 
to be made of glass

for one inch of time, the girl 
chasing the leaving wave, will swim across 
the glass earth & find the blurring
the passing
in her story there is a bottle, inside:
a goldfish & two cents

 

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30 Comments
  • AbellePuppy34

    Congrats!


    8 days ago
  • AstroWriter

    Wow, this is well written! Congrats!!!


    9 days ago
  • aalawrites

    What a beautiful poem! You are so talented!


    12 days ago
  • iamgroot

    Congrats!!


    12 days ago
  • Writing4Life

    Stunning! Congrats on 1st place! (and 50 likes!)


    12 days ago
  • astrea

    Congrats!!


    12 days ago
  • NikBard

    This is fantastic!


    13 days ago
  • serotonin

    this made me so sad T-T congratulations, it's gorgeous


    13 days ago
  • amaryllis

    Breathtaking.


    13 days ago
  • Ava Marie

    This is incredible, congratulations!!!


    13 days ago
  • Awesome Sienna

    Congratulations! I loved the 3rd stanza!


    13 days ago
  • Emma H.

    So good! Congrats!


    13 days ago
  • jellybean568

    Thank you guys so much :)


    13 days ago
  • SamRose

    Congrats! The win was well-deserved! :)


    13 days ago
  • Lucy Sanders

    I love this poem!!! Congratulations, you deserved to win!


    13 days ago
  • Sophiascb

    congrats on winning! This is awesome! I think my favorite little part would have to be, "in your stories it’s always the ones smoking delicate arcs & curves of dreams, life, oxford comma before stage 4 lung cancer, who disappear into silence, into grey." I love it because it feels a little bit more rant-esque like all these things are piling on as I read it. I love that and this poem!! ;)


    13 days ago
  • Anne Blackwood

    Congratulations on a fantastic winning poem!


    13 days ago
  • WrenBirdWrites

    This is amazing! Congratulations on the win! :D


    13 days ago
  • Farrah Z

    wow! beautiful


    13 days ago
  • kate13

    This is so amazing! Congrats, and you totally deserve the win!


    13 days ago
  • VirginaTechGirl101

    Congratulations! This is an AMAZING poem! :)


    13 days ago
  • Squirrel Girl

    That's lovely! You are a very powerful writer, congratulations :)


    13 days ago
  • vastexpansion

    CONGRATS!!! this is a beautifully written poem


    13 days ago
  • serein

    You deserve it--this is beautiful. Congratulations!


    13 days ago
  • FantasyOtter12

    Wow congrats!!!


    13 days ago
  • scorpion

    Congratulations!


    13 days ago
  • ~Zoe N~

    Congrats!!


    13 days ago
  • psithurism

    Congratulations!


    13 days ago
  • rwong

    woah. this is amazing. super well deserved win--congrats!!!


    13 days ago
  • Holy_Grail

    Truly beautiful. Weldone!


    13 days ago