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By: Jemma Manela
Inside your eyes I see space
I see the sun, the moon, the stars
All circling the Earth at their own special pace
I see them swirling around in the deep darkness of your eyes
Inside your eyes I see life
I see the happiness that we live for
that we search and yearn for
Inside your eyes I see what I live for
Inside your eyes I see understanding
I see all of my wrongs being forgiven
An endless amount of sins becoming okay
I see forgiveness in your eyes
In your eyes I see my dreams
I see imagination and determination
that when put together make an infinite amount of realities
In your eyes I see what you hide
I see all of your secrets, fears, and pain
I see your wishes, dreams, and hopes
Inside your eyes, I see you
This is actually the first poem I've ever written.
I really, really like the message that you portray and the way you wrote things out.
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