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Inside Your Eyes

By: Jemma Manela


FREE WRITING

Inside your eyes I see space

I see the sun, the moon, the stars

All circling the Earth at their own special pace

I see them swirling around in the deep darkness of your eyes

 

Inside your eyes I see life

I see the happiness that we live for

that we search and yearn for

Inside your eyes I see what I live for

 

Inside your eyes I see understanding

I see all of my wrongs being forgiven

An endless amount of sins becoming okay

I see forgiveness in your eyes

 

In your eyes I see my dreams

I see imagination and determination

that when put together make an infinite amount of realities

 

In your eyes I see what you hide

I see all of your secrets, fears, and pain

I see your wishes, dreams, and hopes

Inside your eyes, I see you

 


This is actually the first poem I've ever written.


Peer Review




Reviewer Comments

I really, really like the message that you portray and the way you wrote things out.