Loves music, nature, poetry, emotive writing, thinking
Passionate about the environment
•stranded amongst the stars any trying to work out the meaning of it all•
Joined April 2020
On a perpetual semi-hiatus
I need your help! I just got back the expert review and it suggested that I consider clarifying who my poem is addressed to (it's leaders who refuse to take the necessary action against climate change). I'd really appreciate some advice or ideas on this (or any other general feedback, of course).
I was thinking of maybe adding this instead of the first line of the second stanza:
“ Do you, dear leaders, as
you lead under a senseless
sense of self interest,
feel your peoples’ hearts ache?”
Do you think that would help?
Written By: ~wildflower~
April 17, 2021