ect.13

United Kingdom

"Words, in my not-so-humble opinion, are our most inexhaustible source of magic" ~ Albus Dumbledore
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[Joined March 2020]

Message to Readers

Thanks for reading! Reviews would be amazing - I'm more than happy to review in return - and comments are always super helpful too :)
This is very much a piece in metaphor; hopefully you can spot the symbolism in there somewhere. Also I'm not too sure about the before/after headings - comment if you think they work/don't work :)
Thanks again :)

~ There is yet hope. ~

The earth as reclaimed wood

April 11, 2021


~ BEFORE ~
Nearly midnight… tick, tick, tick… 
Creaking and moaning, death
At its open door. Not that the farmer
Noticed. Tick, tick, tick…
Once profitable, then exhausted, 
The owl that once hooted in the rafters
Had gone. So had the bats. Even the spiders
Scuttled away. Tick, tick, tick… 
It crumbled, slowly, on the verge of 
Collapse. 

~ AFTER ~
Rescued from hell’s gate, it lives
Again, it breathes, like a phoenix
Risen from the ashes. All around, life
Flourishes: daffodils bloom, doves soar
In the spring sunshine. It is beauty anew
And it stands proud:
Not used, useful. A partnership of 
Equals.
Curious fingers trace its patterns:
Old, young, attentive, absent minded,
A table which once was a barn.
The clock wound back. 
The world remade.  
~ Word count: 128 ~
~ First published: 5/4/2021 ~

There is yet hope for happily ever after.

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4 Comments
  • nolongeractive

    Re: Thank you!!


    27 days ago
  • nolongeractive

    This is so beautiful and I love all of the meaning and signifigance behind all of your work, it is simply breathtaking!! Amazing job!


    27 days ago
  • Avril

    Oh my goodness this is a brilliant metaphor! I had to read it a few times before I fully got it - but once I did I was like, whoa. This part, "Not that the farmer/Noticed" is really thought-provoking. Oh, and this part: "Not used, useful. A partnership of/Equals" is soo important! This is a unique take on an issue that's talked about a lot. It fills me with so much hope! Also the footnote is perfect. I love everything about this!!


    about 1 month ago
  • gabimarie (hiatus)

    re: thank you! i felt inspired today! thank you for taking the time out of your day to read and comment on my piece. have an amazing day :)


    about 1 month ago