bhumi

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Hi, I'm Bhumi
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should I change the title?

Saturn

April 4, 2021

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Saturn’s rings
Prettiest things
So much to see
Ice rocks gas
But we wonder how
Cassini in orbit 
Years to reach 
Extra ordinary moons
Different secrets 
Waiting to be uncovered
But maybe not
We don’t know what’s hidden 
And perhaps 
That’s what’s best for now

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6 Comments
  • Just_A_Memory

    I love it! I did see the Mars piece before this, and I enjoy the planet names ;)


    30 days ago
  • Rohan’s Defender (Hiatus)

    Re: of course!! :) thank you!


    about 1 month ago
  • Rohan’s Defender (Hiatus)

    Ooh, wow! Great job with this piece! It’s so beautifully written, and I love the last line.
    Hi, I’m Eden! Welcome to WtW! Just to let you know, when you respond to comments, it usually best to go to one of the person’s pieces and reply there, and just put “replying:” or “re:” in front of your reply. That way they’ll definitely see your response. You may already know that, I just wanted to let you know in case you didn’t. But it’s so nice to meet you, and I’m here if you ever need anything or have any questions! I’m so excited to see what else you write!


    about 1 month ago
  • bhumi

    thanks for your suggestions
    I'm not good at naming things either


    about 1 month ago
  • Ava Marie

    But then again, if you're planning on doing more planet writing I feel like you should just leave it because your other piece is simply called "mars"


    about 1 month ago
  • Ava Marie

    Ooh, I like this one a lot!! As for the title, it definitely works , but if you wanted to change it maybe try something like "Saturn's hidden mysteries" or "Saturn's secrets" or "best left uncovered" or "The uncovered things in Saturn's rings".
    Sorry none of these are very good, I'm not great at naming stuff :)


    about 1 month ago