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I'm really not happy with the word choice in the second line but I'm not sure what to replace it with. Any and all suggestions are welcome, not sure why I'm writing about a rotten peach but I'm sure there's a metaphor somewhere. Wasted potential or whatever
I adore the focus on colours in your imagery. The juxtaposition of hard/soft and beautiful/ugly is breathtaking as well.
I noticed reading through that some of your tenses don't match. For example, the first line uses past tense with "dripped" but the third uses present with "dig." I'd recommend making this uniform to streamline the piece!
Since you mention you're not 100% happy with this word choice, maybe you could try something like "pristine white teeth" or "pretty white teeth"? The "p" sound might sit nicely against the "w" sound of white. Of course, it's your piece in the end, and these are only suggestions!