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Message to Readers
Cheese and crackers, this is a little dark *nervous chuckle*
Is a really interesting poem about trauma, the idea that even positive and happy memories can be painful because they remind a person of what they have lost. Or that because of what a person has experienced they realize that the things they thought of as "happy" and "safe" were neither of those things. But because of their nativity, they didn't realize what they were going through. I think that this is a really powerful theme to write about especially in poetry.
I think that a really great way to improve this poem is to just try experimenting with it. Twist and pull it apart, make tons of crappy drafts, really play with the ideas. Because there is so much to unpack with these themes really playing with the ideas and making tons of drafts might really help you find ideas you want to explore further. Like do you want to explore why these memories turned sour, the weird kind of grief that comes with no longer being able to look back for comfort, or the regret that the narrator feels about what happened in these memories?