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I really tried my hand at a dark horror twist. Let me know your thoughts!
Lovely piece! I could feel the thrill. You maintained the suspense till the end. The surprise got well with the flow of story. Well done!
The pain, shock, guilt and misery travelled through your writing to me. It evoked such a range of emotions. Good job! Now...I would encourage you to tell readers more about the main characters. Who are Wanda's parents? Why didn't they get involved in the caused ruckus? When revising, strenghthen the central point.
It was a joy to read. Great work! Keep digging!