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thanks for reading - i am tired
It was really descriptive- and unique descriptions at that! I could really imagine everything happening!
You did really awesome with setting a gloomy mood from the beginning with the blood imagery. I pointed out a few words which seem a bit sticky but other than that- this was absolutely amazing! For something a bit deepening, you could describe the people there, like "bone-thin fingers" and "low-sunk cheekbones" idk, those generally creepier descriptions.
Of course, feel free to not listen to any of my comments because ultimately you know the piece best and this was beautifully done! Great job!