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I loved how it completely switched! That was awesome! It started off being all scary and then it went to a tea party!! A tea party of all things!!
It was really cool how you had the daydream take up roughly half of the story and the breaking of the daydream take up the other half. One thing you could do if you wanted to experiment a little bit would be to describe the forest even more, stay in that daydream for longer and have the breaking of the daydream as a small afterthought. It would show just how imaginative this girl is! But this is completely your choice so feel free to ignore :)
Just one question, this daydream seems to be more scary than light or happy, would "nightmare in a Tea Cup" be more appropriate? It would definitely grab attention! But again, you can ignore :)
This was so much fun to read! :)