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Message to Readers
I would like to know what effect my writing has on the world. I came her to get constructive criticism to improve my writing. Please, let me know how this piece made you feel, if anything at all. And I am always open to suggestions on how to better my work and further my career.
I think that my favourite line would have to be "She stared at me through golden eyes. With the wit of a stranger". It's a really strong opening line, and super engaging. I also love the way these two lines, along with the third one, role off the tongue. Beautiful!!
I felt a little sad after reading this. It's so beautiful and yet had a small tragic underlining. The repetition is phenomenal, I loved the entire thing!!
This poem was so good, and a pleasure to review. I hope you find my comments helpful, but know that you don't have to use them if you don't want to.