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Written By: Avril
March 21, 2021
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re: ahhh gotcha. The last line---it is wonderfully conflicting. I had to ask :)
this sijo is really interesting- I love that the butterflies are carrying songs across oceans, that's really cool, and the ending, I am sooo intrigued... I'm curious, what was your desired emotional pull for the reader?
this line, "He learns to be content with the music of little feet marching to the mines." stuns me pleasingly!
incredible visualization and story line!
Ooo this is SO lovely!!!
I love this! It's so awesome that you stuck to the nature aspect of a sijo and made it really beautiful! And awww, I feel like this is a running metaphor with us becoming content with boring repetitive life instead of gaining wings and flying (I think I'm overanalyzing a bit lolll but really well done!) RE: Awww, thank you so much! And yes! Kids are honestly the best!
re: thanks... I think Im used to it anyways. nice piece made me laugh
I love this piece and I really like the breakdown of a popular childrens' song and how you dove into its deeper and metaphorical meaning!
Aw this is so sweet :)
re: I don't have many suggestions because I really don't read enough poetry...I have so many books and somehow can never get through all of them, and yet I consistently go back to 1984 and pride and prejudice...it's a bit of a problem. I've been meaning to read the illiad, I'm quite looking forward to it and my friend tells me that Oscar Wilde was a really good poet. I do like a bit of Shakespeare's sonnets, but that could be because we've just recently studied him, Edgar Allan Poe would also be a good shout I think? Sorry I can't give you many suggestions but I think with poetry it's important to find what really works for you :)
Wow this is so beautiful. I just reread it like five times. It's just so amazingly profound I almost can't believe it's only three lines long. Incredible job!!
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Re: aww, thank you so much! That means a lot to me! :) Have am amazing night!
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