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It was a beautifully written, moving piece as always. I really loved reading it!
I think it's really nice in its simplicity but you could also add just a sentence here and there describing the surroundings like what he sees looking out the window or something!
I loved it so much and the only comments I made were extremely tiny nitpicks and you can feel free to ignore all of them because they're all just personal opinion. I just know that I like people picking out things like that in mine :)