I know this is quite long but you got to hand it to me- I was in grade 7- Let me know what you think :)
Written By: Nyla
March 18, 2021
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(Oops I forgot to mention this in my last comment) Just wondering -- are "Meek(s)" and "Leer" hinting at the characters' personality? Ah maybe I just overthink everything :D
This is such a pleasure to read! I've read very few ballads before so this is absolutely eye-opening! I do wonder(the same as Nikki) why the maid decided to kill her though -- was it because of jealousy? Or hatred due to her attitude? Apology here if I missed the details that suggested the reason. Anyway, I really enjoy your writings, and can't wait to read much much more! :D
It is so sweet and sad, a beautiful ballad. Great job!
omg wow! this is actually one of the first ballads i've ever read. i love the way you've told such a beautiful story. so wait....the bride was going to hide till the wedding was over right? then why did the maid kill her when she found her? im sorry.. im a teensy bit confused :)
re: EEEEEEE! THANK YOU SO MUCH *blushes*
yas! i just love strong female leads... and i was feeling evil that day ;)
haha true the pneumonia thing was a TOTAL fluke :D
Ooh! This was really interesting! I haven't read many ballads on this site and the execution of the story and the verse definitely gave it that old-timey vibe! Nice work 7th grade you! :)
Ahhh, this ballad is amazing! Much better than what I wrote at 14 XD and your writing has totally improved since then!
Re: I'm going to reply to all your comments with a huge thank you! I haven't been very active lately on WtW, just roaming when I can, but school just started up (may I say I am in love with trigonometry?) and it's been busy. But I read all your comments, and just-- thank you so much for them!
And word vomit XD I guess that's what all writers do, it's simply that our vomit is prettier than normal vomit.
Anyways, if you wanna talk, let me know!!
Wow!!! I really like this :) The storyline is so well-written and it progresses perfectly! The rhyming pattern is also wonderful! And of course, your writing has definitely improved though this piece is awesome!!!
Re: Omg, you are so so kind!!!! I really don't know what to say, you're just incredibly nice and genuine, and such a talented, amazing writer! I really loved that last piece that I wrote too because of how simple, cute, and true it was--probably one of my favorites as well :) I'm so thrilled that my comments make you smile especially because all of your writing and all of your comments make my day 100x brighter!! Thanks so much for the follow--you're the best!! Labradoodles are so adorable, yes, definitely as soon as you get your own place you should totally get a puppy lol :)
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