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i'm writing both a novel duology and a book of poetry. are either of them good? no.
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rhyme scheme

March 16, 2021

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your fingers dancing along my spine, 
holding more breaths in your chest then mine, 
and someone made you this divine, 
but why not me 

I hold these stances with open hearts 
as you slowly tear my world apart 
creating you a brand new start 
but why not me 

these broken plates, these sweaty hands, 
this messed up form of contraband,
and some things fall into the plan, 
but why not me 

you fall victim to these deity's, 
but my heart has more starts then these, 
to hold you victim as they please 
but why not me 

I write about this steady prose 
though no one can lay eyes their on those 
but this festering feeling only grows 
without symmetry

my gripping hands can throttle plights 
though I still can't sleep through the nights 
my body is still afraid of heights 
though you disagree 

my mortal heart holds less desires;
she pulls you from the burning piles 
and holds you closer while sunshine smiles 
but why not me 




 
i've never actually written something that rhymes (besides song lyrics) so I thought I'd give it a try

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3 Comments
  • ✰Chloe✰

    Aaa I'm so jealous- I am absolutely terrible at rhyme scheme, a consistent syllable count is more of my forte, but you did this beautifully! I quite like the consistency of "but why not me," because I really think it ties it all together and it makes the ending that much more powerful. Amazing job :)


    6 months ago
  • Nyla

    Wow! I can't believe you've never written anything that doesn't rhyme before because this is just beautiful! I really hope you continue! "my gripping hands can throttle plights/ though I still can't sleep through the nights/ my body is still afraid of heights
    though you disagree " was my favourite part of it because it was the different stanza and I thought that was really cool but I also really loved the repetition because it really added to the impactfulness! Awesome!!


    6 months ago
  • ✧♬TwinklingLights♬✧

    I
    I
    I just
    wow
    is this based on a real story?
    its beautiful


    6 months ago