Peer Review by Luiza L (Brazil)

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The Sea of Thieves

By: The Coy-Fish


FREE WRITING

There were once two pirates fair,
not quite the luckiest pair,
stuck in a prison they were,
The Sea of Thieves...

But they knew unlike most,
there was a faraway coast,
The Shores of Gold...

They started there journey,
to the shores of gold
or that damned locker of old.
fate would decide...

Cannon to the right of them!
Cannon to the left of them!
Cannon in front of them,
volleyed and thundered.

On they sailed through sea and squall
hoping to reach victory's call,
on to the shores of gold!

They sailed through powder smoke,
on through the krakens choke,
on through teeth and snare,
hanging on to a single prayer.

without anything dear,
those two pirates feared but fared
better then then others,

On to the shores of gold,
trying to reach victory's hold,
those two men just wanted out.
They did not cry or pout.

For they knew,
the shores of gold,
would give powers old,
and they could finally
leave their prison!

The Sea of Thieves...

Sorry I haven't written much lately. I just haven't been to inspired. I know this poem is a little random, but its about pirates. I actually took some inspiration from an classic poem called "Charge of the Light Brigade". You should look it up and see the history behind it. Its quite interesting.

Peer Review

When talking about pirates, it's very common to remember the sea music! This poem flow as well as the music! The rhythm, the way the words rhyme, this could even be a song! I loved it.


I love how the poem is very descriptive and even mysterious, but I love to have developed characters in this narrative, I think it would give an interesting touch to the piece.


Reviewer Comments

I adore this poem! Is very whimsical, rhythmic, and has an adventurous narrative that is very interesting! Congratulations!