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We had to do this in Language Arts class, a thank-you-for-life letter to our parents... So I just wanted to get some opinions. Thanks for taking the time to read it!
First of all, I loved it! I was pretty much moved to tears. I love the line 'More than can be said even if it was written in a library of books' I think that's the line that made me click on you piece and read the entire thing, it's a really strong statement though conveying something emotional.
I'm emotional mostly, also really impressed with the way this is structured. I don't like dragging something out for dramatic effect however I think this was the perfect sized 'introduction' before you actually got to the thank you part. Well Done!
Did it take you long to think of how you wanted to word it, I mean, what you wanted to say before and after you delivered the main message?
I'd say look at the words you used in some lines and see if you can find words that better fit or convey the message more effectively. 'For the life you choose to save' as an example, do you mean chose? Apart from that I absolutely loved it and it made me pretty emotional. Well done! Thank you for sharing the piece.