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I love the way you are able to rhyme without it seeming forced. There's something that is morbidly endearing about comparing the worms to your friends.
Honestly, I think it's perfect. The shortness of the poem keeps it concise and is able to capture your attention without losing it halfway through.
Just so so so good! Morbid and dark in the best way possible.