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I really like the whole concept of this. Your descriptions of everything were really great!
I think the main thing for me is, maybe describe Hank a bit more in the beginning and during his transformation. Another thing is that most of your paragraphs have indents, but not all. I would recommend indenting them all to help the reader. Other than that, just the little comments I left highlighted.
This was really good, and a interesting read. I love how you didn't give a diagnosis until very close to the end. How did you do on the assignment?
Also, sorry this is so late!!!