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I lost my Mum to suicide this year, so this a topic that I feel very strongly about. Just seeing someone writing about it is sure to catch my attention. I also love your style, almost like a poem. It encompasses everything I believe in, and tracks wonderfully through why we should be talking about this, why we aren't talking about this, and how to cope with suicidal thoughts. This is a brilliant speech.
It is just beautiful to read something that fits in so strongly with everything I believe. I love the blatant statement of "I am an onlooker". I can't put my finger on it, but something about it makes the speech better. (Yay, vague compliments!)
Proofreading could get rid of a few random capitalised letters. Also, maybe we have a different internal voice, but I feel like although 97% of this flows beautifully, some bits don't. "Kids with depression think they're [new line] Alone" sounds weird in my head because of the random new line. Also, between "And I know you matter" and "To make it through school", there could be a few pauses thrown in/taken out to make it all flow better.
Apart from those (very small) things -which, to be honest, is just me being picky - there isn't much left for you to do. I love your speech and the fact that someone else out there is talking about this, and your writing style is incredibly beautiful. Keep going! :D