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The ending line. It follows the idea that evil leads to evil, but at the same time you feel slightly bad for the narrator. Sure, he killed the man who he thought "broke her" but only because she meant a great deal to him. You did a great job of rationalizing a "villain's" motivation and making him semi-sympathetic
With each verse, you switch the overall feeling you're evoking: happiness, sadness, vengeance with a side of horror, and finally crushing loneliness, emptiness, and depression. You do this with the repetition and contradictions. First stanza is a pattern of sad declarations immediately contradicted with happy ones. The second stanza switches the order, and the same pattern is followed with the rest. The last line is different. While all the other stanzas are three lines long, this one is just a single line. It's entirely alone. You keep your lines short and to the point, leaving no room to argue.
The prompt accepts your apology, albeit begrudgingly.