pyrrhic

United States

pyrrhic;
to be victorious at a cost that outweighs the success
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any pronouns
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previously abby.a

Message from Writer

you're not alone. you're loved. you're worth it. you're beautiful. i promise.
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i’m paisley blue’s #1 fan
and yours, too, person reading this :]

i love you more than i did yesterday, and i'll love you more tomorrow than i did today

February 17, 2021

FREE WRITING

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i press
soft kisses to your
cheeks
hair
nose
lips
oh so light
oh so sweet

reminding you that
i'm here i promise
and i'm never ever
leaving you i promise

we smile into each other
and i think i hear the stars in your laugh
hold each other with soft hands
i think i see the moon in your eyes

time is just a feeble thing
and i'll love you until time
exists no more, i'll hold you
until our seconds slowly tick
away, signaling our end. I'll
kiss you until our minutes run
to zero, but i hope, oh how
i hope, that time never comes...
i just wanted to write, so it's nothing fancy. any suggestions? i feel like my writing growth has plateaued a bit, so any tips or recommendations are always welcome! constructive criticism is much needed.

i hope you're having a splendid day. i'm sure you're looking as dapper as ever ;]

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10 Comments
  • StutiWrites

    this is beautiful! great work<3


    3 months ago
  • Odyssey

    Re: Thanks so much! That made my day! :)


    3 months ago
  • mirkat

    very emotional and the imagery is amazing and i love it and what erin said bout the comments section lol all of these made me laugh! dapper! what dee said...
    <3<3<3


    3 months ago
  • anemoia by a thread

    Ah ah the imagery of this piece. Hearing stars in someone’s laugh, what a perfect way to describe it.
    AND THIS CHARMING COMMENT SECTION. I’m getting so much Victorian/Edwardian era vibes from one word.


    3 months ago
  • ~Zoe N~

    re: thank you so much :) also, beautiful piece!!


    3 months ago
  • Paisley Blue

    (just saw your and dee's conversation about dapper-)

    my idea of dapper is much more like, young tall dude in top hat and coattails and smiling eyes and quiet voice and "will you save me a dance" and watching the room gallantly

    but lol i think both of your terms of dapper fit you two just perfectly ;)


    3 months ago
  • resident philocalist

    re: well i think our terms of dapper are different lol. im like cowgirl gentlelady and youre like friendly old man who befriends outcasted young women and let's them read his books


    3 months ago
  • resident philocalist

    *tips sherriffs hat* m'lady *swings back onto horse, my tailcoats flapping* i'll be seeing you *wink*

    that is the aesthetic of the word dapper

    ANYWAYS
    great piece 10/10 amazing incredible showstopping never been done before


    3 months ago
  • psithurism

    ooh i like the word dapper. it makes me feel like i'm wearing a top hat and a monocle.


    3 months ago
  • Paisley Blue

    why thank you, i quite fancy myself looking dapper indeed.

    sorry lol

    this piece is absolutely beautiful and you are absolutely beautiful and she is absolutely beautiful and it makes me feel so warm and happy inside and ahhh yall are so cute!!! :D love you so so so so much and i love this poem so so so much and yayyyy <333
    :))


    3 months ago