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I wrote this for my writing class, as a show paragraph. Thought I'd share it with you guys to see what you thought. Please review!
I love the way the beginning brings out a childlike side of the character. I think a lot of people could relate to her and share the same sense of security in their own blanket-forts.
I would like to hear more about the salmon. It says that it’s her favorite, but I would like to know why. Does it have some type of symbolism? Or does it remind her of something?
I love how this piece flows. The sentences fit together so well and the words capture you when you’re reading. The only part I was slightly confused about was when you brought up the food. Everything before that had lots of description and depicts how it made her feel, but the ending felt kind of rushed in that aspect.