Isla Hutchins

United Kingdom

15
(she/her)
I make music & write a bit :)

Message to Readers

I'd love to get peer reviews and know what you think about this song!

The darling kite (with recording)

February 15, 2021

https://soundcloud.com/isla-hutchins/the-darling-kite


A bundle of twigs,
Ties together with string,
Wrapped in soft cotton,
Acts like a wing.

Off to the runway,
With the rush of the breeze,
She's up and away,
floating above the trees.

So come on, darling,
Let's fly through the air,
Let's fly through the air,
Soar the sky, with no care,
We'll give the clouds, the last word,
When we're off, with the bluebirds,
Off with the blue birds, 
They're song will be heard.

She's filled with grace,
In every way,
The darling glider twirls,
A magnificent display.

Just a bundle of twigs,
Ties together with string,
Wrapped in soft cotton,
Acts like a wing.

So come on, darling,
Let's fly through the air,
Let's fly through the air,
Soar the sky, with no care,
We'll give the clouds, the last word,
When we're off, with the bluebirds,
Off with the blue birds, 
They're song will be heard.

 
oops! kinda messed up trynna upload something else. Anyway, I've recorded everything on this myself using logic pro, use headphones & enjoy!

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4 Comments
  • Isla Hutchins

    Their song* (grammar mistake oops!)


    4 months ago
  • remi'sgotinkstains

    wow this is so beautiful and really well written! good job!


    4 months ago
  • barelybear

    Wait lmao the title is a kite and I thought you meant the bird. Ok lel I get the “bundle of twigs” line now. I think it could be developed a little, but now I’ve got it, the imagery seems really beautiful. Oops.
    Good luck :)


    4 months ago
  • barelybear

    I love your recording, especially the birds at the start and your amazing singing! It looks like you’re new to the site, so welcome! :D
    I think your chorus is super strong, as well as the links to flying you have (like “Acts like a wing”). When redrafting, perhaps think about clarity, as that would make the song even catchier. I was a little confused about the “Bundle of twigs” and what it meant.
    Hope this helps, and have a great day!


    4 months ago